3rd Victor Villasenor: Entries, Entries, Featured
Unnatural selection
Dec
Every first sentence suggests a plethora (I know, smart huh?!) of possibilities. Sometimes – like Terrie does here – the art lies in not showing your hand. The inner landscape she shares will drive the story, and some things are worth waiting for.
Vacation Points by Terrie Leigh Relf
It wasn’t that Sylvie didn’t appreciate winning the office competition for an all-expenses-vacation-for-the-whole family, and it wasn’t that she didn’t appreciate the months, perhaps years, of not having to appear at work, and it certainly wasn’t the promise of a new contract when (and if) she chose to return, but that she was single. She used to say, “blissfully so,” when asked if she were married with children or married – period. Now, she would just shrug, as if that mere human gesture was worth a sentence or two.
I’m panting. I’m salivating. I’m like a dog on the end of the pier, my tails is wagging and I’m ready to leap. Good job T-rex, this is outstanding.
Seriously? Why thank you, Stangesaurus!
T-Rex
This is the kind of strong beginning that merits further reading. Great!
Why thank you EFNT4 etc. Are you an updated Synth?
It certainly wasn’t as if you didn’t purposely pull us in with the way you set this one up. You get so personal sometimes, it certainly feels as if you are talking to me. But then again that is your Talent!
Why thank you, Kyle. When I was in grad school, one of my childhood chums was also in the creative writing seminar, and she said pretty much the same thing, only that my writing was experiential, that one needed to just step into it, or allow it to swirl around you. Something like that. She said it better. I think she used an ocean metaphor, now that I think of it. . .
Brill bedone and thus fezdig were had by one. Brilliant is what I’m say I guess…good one TerSnare…
DiRare. . .
Thing nice say me thank you! Story where be yours? Forward looking yours be I!
I recently had my plethera removed when I was down in dearth